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                        Up in the air                                 Back down














I throw my dreams                      But they never come              
When I throw everything I've got for the world to see it all ends up floating in space to be forgotten and dismissed.
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Happy holidays! Your haiku has been featured on Multhaiku's Twitter page at @GenreHaiku! :iconheartcandleplz:
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CosmicYoshi Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2014
Great concept!
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CuriouslyAlone Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2014
Thank you! ^^
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copper9lives Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow.
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prettyflour Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

 Hey there,

 

Prettyflour here on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition: with the critique you requested.

 

This is a fantastic example of how just a few words can be used to say SO MUCH. The reason the brevity works so well is that it leaves room for the reader to bring their own interpretation. I think the way you structured this and the use of italics is a great touch.

 

I wouldn’t change a thing!

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Likoro Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This poem thought me a great lesson..... I WILL TIE UP ALL OF MY DREAMS!

thx curiously, you are a dream savior :D
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CuriouslyAlone Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014
Haha anytime likoro ^_^
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howlingghostwolf Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Wow I love how this is written and the message behind it!
Awesome job ^-^
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CuriouslyAlone Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Glad you liked it :meow: means a great deal to me ^_^
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howlingghostwolf Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
:meow: ^-^
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Chickenpea Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very, very heavy. XD Love it! 
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CuriouslyAlone Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
Why thank you! :D
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28spike Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I love this.
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CuriouslyAlone Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
Oh... doh... :iconohstopityouplz:
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Andr0o Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Man, this is like choose-your-own-poetry. Pretty much the best.
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CuriouslyAlone Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
Why thank you kind person :blush:
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ilyilaice Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014
interesting format.
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CuriouslyAlone Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014
Thank you ^_^
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Bebaldo Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's really good! The simplicity brings something more with the structure. I love it!
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CuriouslyAlone Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014
Thank you very much :meow:
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ShiningSteel Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I loved it! :love: Really describes how I feel right now.
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CuriouslyAlone Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014
Glad I could strike a connection and that you liked it! :love:
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014   Writer
The words may be simple but the structure of the poem is something else. You really showed "gravity" literally in your work. Stunning and ingenious. Bravo!
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CuriouslyAlone Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014
Thank you very much I greatly appreciate it ^_^
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goingpandas66 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Student Artist
I love how simple this is ^.^
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CuriouslyAlone Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014
Thanks panda :meow: :glomp:
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goingpandas66 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Student Artist
:hug: visually interesting too haha
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CuriouslyAlone Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014
oh you ^_^
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